Tuesday, 20 September 2011

New Ending For Chapter 31 (Read My Last Post! I had t re-do it, so there. here you go.)


“Wait!” I screamed. Katherine rolled her eyes.
“Ugh, what now?”
“I dropped my earring back at the gas station.” I said, quickly removing my left earring and dropping it on the floor. Katherine groaned.
“You have 30 seconds starting now.” I opened the car door and dashed back to the gas station, unsure of exactly what I was doing. Before I knew it, I found myself standing next to Alec’s unconscious body. I leaned over and brushed his dark hair out of his eyes. I wasn’t exactly sure what I was intending to do at this point-I hadn’t really thought it out that far.
“Why does this have to be so complicated?” I wondered aloud. It was only a little less than a year ago that I’d been a normal thirteen year old girl, living my normal thirteen year old life. There was never any reason for me to run from anyone. I didn’t have to lie or stab my friends in the back, no pun intended. But even though I hated everything that was going on, I had no regrets, not even about what I was doing now.
“I’ll come back for you, I promise. Then we’ll have an eternity for me to explain everything.” I smiled. “I love you.” I leaned down and gently kissed his now cold cheek. “It’ll all work out. I promise.” I whispered. I quickly scribbled down a note with a scrap piece of paper and a pen I found in my pocket and put it in his hand, curling his motionless fingers around it. I heard my friends’ voices coming from out of the store and made a run for the van, jumping in the passenger’s side quickly and putting on my seatbelt.
“Took you long enough.” Katherine said.
“I couldn’t find it.” I looked down at the floor, finding the spot where I’d dropped my earring earlier. “Oh, there it is. It must’ve fallen out when I got in the car.” I picked it up and put it back in my ear. Katherine rolled her eyes.
“Of course it did.” She said in an annoyed tone. “Are you ready now?” I nodded.
“Good.”  Katherine hammered down on the gas pedal and we sped off onto the busy streets of New York City.

3 comments:

  1. OK!! Great job.....but......now what happens???? You just made me want more!!!

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  2. You know as artists we recognize that there really is no such thing as a totally unique idea. We take in what is around us and make it part of our thinking. We often don't realize that our ideas are triggered by other experiences and were not born in our brain from nothing! Good for you for recognizing your goof and making it right! That is what an ethical artist/writer does! I am proud of you!

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  3. I agree with Aunt Wendy. That sort of thing happens all the time. Often, when I listen to my own songs, I can hear bits and pieces of the songs that influenced them.

    We are but mere conduits. Creativity and inspiration flow from many sources. How we synthesize it all is what makes our work unique.

    By the way, when you re-wrote those last few paragraphs, you actually improved the ending of the chapter! I liked it before... but I really like it now!

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